Once upon a time there were 4 boys called Fereti, Wesley and Michael. They were planning to go skydiving because they wanted to spend time with each other.
Wesley’s age is 25, his job is chief and boxing. Michaels job is sports and chief and his age is 24 . Cedric's job is at the airport, he is 23 years old. Fereti is scared of heights so we let him face his fear.
When the boys left to go skydiving something bad happened. That thing that was bad was a fire. The boys went to the plane and saw a bush fire near the plane cause the plane was near the bushes. When Wesley spotted the bush fire he dialed 111 fast as possible. And Michael stopped the car and turned around. After 20 minutes no policemen or firefighters showed up so Michael and his friends went to the fire engine place and reported to them fast. And then they went to the police station because the bushfire was about to touch all of the planes. The fire made a big explosion cause of the plane that was next to the bush. When the police and the firemen went to the rescue they couldn’t take the fire out so the rain came down.
The rain was pouring down and the rain helped cause it was taking out the fire. And god helped the policemen and the firefighters cause the angels were with them 100%. When the fire ran out the policemen and the firefighters were laughing cause they didn’t take out the fire.
next time make sure your writing make sense and proofread
ReplyDeletewow scary that story made me so scad luck the rain came if it did not you would die
ReplyDeleteit fine but you need to sense and proofread
ReplyDeleteGreat job wesley maybe next time you could make sure that your writing make sense
ReplyDeletewow good job you have put more dialogue which is better so next time add more lauguage feature
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